Yayy! I`m so excited! :D

Subject: Yayy! I`m so excited! :D Mon Oct 18, 2010 7:10 pm

Hello everyone!

I feel sort of depressed, because I`m not fond of writing english stories...
INSTEAD!
I`M A HELL OF A CHINESE-FANTASY FAG WRITER perv

Story Team Form:

Spoiler:

I am also translating Traditional chinese to english manga for a Manga translation group. (my current project is "Kimi ni Todoke.")

Soooooo~
Below are the links to my short stories. I`m sorry, you might not be able to find much english stories... but if you can, please read my chinese stories!

English Short Story; Too Little Too Late
English Prose; Ever Since

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Chinese Short Story; 國三那年的三十三朵紙玫瑰
Chinese Short Story; 只屬於妳的"第一份蛋餅
Chinese Prose; 曾掛著「不想活」在嘴邊的我

I also have an interest to proofread other peoples` works.
So you`ll probably see me around the forum critiquing others` stories! x]

ENJOY!

-Annie.

Subject: Re: Yayy! I`m so excited! :D Wed Oct 20, 2010 8:00 am

Requirements are up. Update your application.

Subject: Re: Yayy! I`m so excited! :D Wed Oct 20, 2010 6:35 pm

UPDATED.

Subject: Re: Yayy! I`m so excited! :D Thu Oct 21, 2010 1:30 pm

Hello Miss Annie. You're my favorite. No offense to the other applicants.

I'd like you to start a series one day. Lol.

Now, let us begin:

Grammar:
-From now on, I'm only saying good or bad grammar. You, are, good.

Storyline:
-Your short story, Too Little Too Late, will be graded.
-I like it. Awesome.
-A few issues with your choice of words:

Annie wrote:: “No, your parents strongly asked us to keep you here.” He answered immediately, “You’re suffering from brain tumor right now. Where do you think you can go?”

It should be: "No, your parents asked us". Strongly would go better with "recommend" or something. And the "he" should be lowercased.

Suspense:
-I really like it :P
-Wow..it's amazing.

Conclusion:
Again, start a story. You have amazing talent. Nice work. Welcome to the Story Team.

Off topic: YES! FINALLY DONE CLEANING UP THE APPS.